Wavering in the blue darkness
Wrapped in a sliver of the moon
Wild blossoms entwined in each tress
Her scent makes the willows swoon
Stepping back in the inky shadows
Quivering lips and straining eyes
He journeyed infinite crests and furrows
For just a scent of her many sighs
She knew for eons before he arrived there
He would cross time that held them apart
To touch her warm footprint or a wisp of her hair
And seek a place for his soul in her heart
Endeavoured to find paradise all his life
He has pursued the key fervently
At last he finds her after such strife
This time he would not let her flee
The hard planes of his countenance
The obsidian glitter of his shoulder
Tormented her from the first glance
She is as enraptured as he is of her
This once she would not disappear
This once it would be as it was meant
This once he would not lose her
In the depths of clouds unspent
In a slight wave that stills every motion
Within reach of his outstretched hand
She brings soft light into the dark ocean
That has eternally submerged his land
Infinite clouds become infinite clarity
In a lingering embrace of infinite grief
Giving him what he had wanted an eternity
She wanes in his arms with a smile so brief
Upon finding paradise and losing his moon
He cries unlike one who has received his answer
And the spell of nirvana is broken too soon
He finally knows his paradise was her
12 comments:
why does she disappear so soon?? :(
Dunno why. I wanted them to be incomplete despite the fruition. If they'd had a long happy time together, maybe I wouldn't have been happy with this piece.
AWESOME!!!!! i dont know what else to say, just odnt have the words. Its very beautiful.
And i dont know but somehow i m connecting it too much but ya the ending part is, well i wud have loved it to be otherwise.
Its beautiful Isha, always been a pleasure to read your posts.
I'm glad you liked it, Faizee. Err... I think I know why you identify with it :P
this paradise reminded me of "la belle dame sans merci" poem. This is
beautiful!!
Thanks Monty. John Keats!! It makes up for all the frustrating writer's blocks.
It's pretty! don't know if it reminds of the john keats poem but there was a poem we studied in the cbse syllabus about love and longing.
Thanks Suruchi. Strange, how someone else told me the exact same thing as this! Nobody could recollect which poem it was though.
Why so serious ? :)
This looks like any fairy tale ..rapunzel, shrek (i know that it's not exactly a fairy tale), etc etc..
Fairy tale, but not for kids..
But very beautifully written.. really liked it. Especially the first para..thgh could not really get the meaning of what exactly did you mean by "wrapped in a sliver of moon". The remaining three sentences go nicely with the flow,,Can ya throw some light on that?
@Ant - Don't ask me to explain it to you for heaven's sake! I wanted it to be surreal and tragic; imagine achieving your own personal heaven and then forgetting yourself and everyone you've loved - will it still be heaven? Maybe it didn't come across to you that way. But then it's open to any number of interpretations.
As for 'sliver of the moon' - it's a reference to the moon and /or bathed in moonbeams, etc. (she's the moon he has pined for). It's a metaphor - don't ask me to decipher it for you!! You'll ruin the effect I was trying at :(
u could have put it in a more subtle manner...and your reply was what i was looking for...coz i was not very clear what exactly that line meant..
Sorry for being obtuse, Ant.
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